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by Taylor H.
Mon Apr 22, 2019 4:57 pm
Forum: Group H
Topic: Women’s Empowerment and Other Issues in Mona Lisa Smile and And the Spring Comes
Replies: 10
Views: 10344

Re: Women’s Empowerment and Other Issues in Mona Lisa Smile and And the Spring Comes

Here is my reflection about this experience and my revision process: 1) What were your expectations for the border-crossing activity? Are your expectations met? Why or why not? Once I understood the assignment, I was excited to finally put my newly-learned ideas about foreign rhetorical practices to...
by Taylor H.
Mon Apr 22, 2019 12:00 am
Forum: Group H
Topic: Women’s Empowerment and Other Issues in Mona Lisa Smile and And the Spring Comes
Replies: 10
Views: 10344

Re: Women’s Empowerment and Other Issues in Mona Lisa Smile and And the Spring Comes

Hi all in Group H, First and foremost, I wanted to say that it has been a pleasure getting to know you all and have read your essays. I greatly value this experience. With that being said, I took your comments and suggestions into consideration and have greatly revised my essay to analyze these two ...
by Taylor H.
Sat Apr 20, 2019 5:27 pm
Forum: Group H
Topic: Women’s Empowerment and Other Issues in Mona Lisa Smile and And the Spring Comes
Replies: 10
Views: 10344

Re: Women’s Empowerment and Other Issues in Mona Lisa Smile and And the Spring Comes

Hi Qirong, Thanks for taking the time to read my essay. I agree with your advice that I should balance the essay more by adding more analysis of And the Spring Comes. I am really interested in women's role in American society in the earlier part of the 20th century so I appreciate your compliments a...
by Taylor H.
Thu Apr 18, 2019 12:41 am
Forum: Group H
Topic: Movie Review & Critique
Replies: 7
Views: 6481

Re: Movie Review & Critique

Hi Shuixiu Y, Thanks for your reply to both of our responses. I think overall, the combination of my grammar/structural advice along with Chris' advice in regards to content will provide you a wealth of points to address in your revision. I, too enjoyed the "knocking at the door of learning&quo...
by Taylor H.
Thu Apr 18, 2019 12:30 am
Forum: Group H
Topic: Marriage or Career, Which One Is Better for Woman
Replies: 5
Views: 5687

Re: Marriage or Career, Which One Is Better for Woman

Yanqiong Y, I agree that your paper poses many questions but not any solid answers...although isn't that the point? Everyone is able to make decisions for themselves. I like that you leave these questions up to personal interpretation. Since these questions are posed as a thesis statement of sorts, ...
by Taylor H.
Thu Apr 18, 2019 12:24 am
Forum: Group H
Topic: The Movie Review
Replies: 8
Views: 7416

Re: The Movie Review

Hi Xiaochun, About your first point in your follow-up comment, I was referring to the sentence, "First all of, the setting of the film presents the emotional tone of the story, rendering a specific atmosphere." I'm curious about what makes it an emotional film. I see from your response tha...
by Taylor H.
Thu Apr 18, 2019 12:15 am
Forum: Group H
Topic: "Frames" and "Bicycles"
Replies: 10
Views: 9514

Re: "Frames" and "Bicycles"

Qirong S, I'm glad you plan to use my suggestions to clarify your essay further. Doing so will make it easier for the reader to understand since you have such an interesting take on the two movies and their use of symbolism. Like I mentioned, I think adjusting the wording of "frames" to &q...
by Taylor H.
Thu Apr 18, 2019 12:10 am
Forum: Group H
Topic: Women’s Empowerment and Other Issues in Mona Lisa Smile and And the Spring Comes
Replies: 10
Views: 10344

Re: Women’s Empowerment and Other Issues in Mona Lisa Smile and And the Spring Comes

Hi Yanqiong Y,

Thank you. Along with the others suggestions that were provided to me, I plan to go into a deeper analysis and increase the comparison between the two movies for my revision.

Thanks, Taylor
by Taylor H.
Sun Apr 14, 2019 7:06 pm
Forum: Group H
Topic: Movie Review & Critique
Replies: 7
Views: 6481

Re: Movie Review & Critique

Shuixiu Ye, I am not sure about the statement: "a first-year teacher from Oakland State, who had wanted to teach at Wellesley College all her life. So when a position opened in the Art History department, she pursued it single-mindedly until she was hired." First, Katherine graduated from ...
by Taylor H.
Sun Apr 14, 2019 6:17 pm
Forum: Group H
Topic: Marriage or Career, Which One Is Better for Woman
Replies: 5
Views: 5687

Re: Marriage or Career, Which One Is Better for Woman

Yanqiong Y, From the start, you wrote a strong introduction that summarizes both movies accurately and concisely. Since I am also interested in women's empowerment, I enjoyed the approach you took to analyzing these movies by discussing the concept of women's choices and their happiness. I also like...